The Story of Kei (Chapter 2 added!)

[kei]

[K-chan]

[Shino]

Students start at my dojo as early as 3 1/2

So I think 4 is a good age.

[Azurel]

Well I stand to have my knowlege of Japanese culture slapped in my face ^_^

[Doot]

Kei, I gotta commend you for taking the crits and using them to your advantage. Am interested in seeing what more you'll make of it. Definitely balancing out your characters stats makes it a more believable fighter/entity. And I agree 4, is a pretty good age to start.

[kei]

[Therin]

[kei]

Update: Character skills have been updated and balanced, and chapter 2 of my story is on it's way just one more prargraph to go.
^_^

Any comments on my updated skills and techniques, please leave, thank you.

[kei]

The Story of Kei
Chapter 2:

The next morning comes and Kei decides to go into town for some food. He stops at a nearby kiosk selling pork buns and grabs himself two. As he eats he begins to ponder. “That girl..” he thought to him self. “She’s really something spectacular.” he sighs. As he’s about to get up he feels a hand touch his shoulder lightly, he turns around to see 4 men in black suits and a women in a purple dress standing behind him. “My name is Mitsugi Ayami “ the women says to him. “ We are looking for a someone could you assist us?” Kei looks up at her after finishing his last pork bun.

Mitsugi Ayami: “A young female.” as she describes the characteristics of the person , Kei begins to think.
“This girl their describing sounds a lot li-” suddenly he stops in thought, and a couscous look crosses over his face. Mitsugi notices this.

Mitsugi Ayami: “Something wrong… ? she says with a curious expression.
Kei: “No, no, not at all, just had some pork bun go down the wrong tube that’s all.” he says smiling nervously. Mitsugi looks at him with an odd look.
Mitsugi: “I see.., well if you happen to find this girl, please notify me.” she drops a card towards Kei’s lap, and walks off.
Kei: "Sure..." he says.
as he watches them walk away in the distance.

Kei shakes it off his mind for the time and stands up. And heads further into town. He begins to think about what Setsuna had said to him the previous night. “Omyou” he said to himself. “I wonder if I can find some research on those..” Following his inspiration and instincts he heads into a local library close by.
He begins to search around the ails to see what he could find. Coming across him a young voice calls out to him.

Librarian : “ Can I help you?” the voice ask.
Kei turns around to see a little girl with specs on , she smiles at him.

Kei: “I’m looking for something on some warriors called Omyou Mystics” he replied to her.
Librarian: “Hmmm” she said, thinking. “I don’t believe we have anything in this library on those, “ she answered. “But you may want to try the shrine just north of here. They may have some information for you.”
Kei: “How far north is it?” he asked.
Librarian: “Not to far, just keep going north into the mountains, until you reach a bridge over looking a woodsy ledge. After you pass over the bridge you’ll be at the entrance.”
she says smiling.
Kei: “Thank you”, he says as he bows and heads out .

Kei makes his way to the mountain, and begins to travel up it, in search for the bridge.

Kei: “This trip, certainly is taking longer than she said it would..” he says striving and trying to catch his breath.
Kei: “I wonder how much Farther.”

Finally he comes across the bridge, it is over looking a beautiful bamboo forest peak. Kei looks at the bridge.

Kei: "I can’t really tell if it’s stable or not” he says unsurely."

He begins to cross the bridge, the sun is brightly shining in his direction as it begins to set. For a second he begins to lose his balance but regains it by grabbing on to the side ropes.

Kei: “Phew, that was close” he says as he sighs out.

Suddenly from behind him he hears unraveling sound, as he begins to sweat nervously, he looks behind him, too late one of the ropes tide to the ledge had snapped. “Ahhh!" he screams as he begins to plummet downward. Then a familiar voice., shouts out. “DAMAKTA OBRISK ZIYOU!” he looks upward to the cliff to see her.

Kei: “Setsuna!” he shouts.
Setsuna: “Kei hold on!”

Suddenly a loud screeching is heard, and to his amazement a giant fiery figure in the shape of a bird appears right below him and brakes his fall. And brings him back up to safety on the other side of the ledge. Kei looks amazed and shocked as he looks at it.
Setsuna: “Are you alright, did you get injured in the fall?”
Kei: Wh, wha, what is it?!
He ask her in an eager voice.

She smiles at him.
Setsuna: It is a spirit. She says smiling again.
Kei: Of what?!
Setsuna: “The phoenix.” The answers.

She then turns around and to the spirit, and says “Indikum!” the spirit fades away into the sky,
then Suddenly the nearly falls over. “Setsuna” he says as he catches her in his arms.

Kei: “Are you going to be alright?”
Setsuna: “I’ll be fine that summoning used up most of my energy.”
Kei: “Are you sure?”
Setsuna: “Yes, I’m sure I just need to rest a bit”

A load howl is heard be hind them in the distance, as they both turn their heads to look, they see a tall warn brick building, and as they moon shines bright they sit there.

Kei: “Is this-”
She answers before the question is finished.
Setsuna: “Yes” She replied, “this is the Hijinktou Shrine.”
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To be continued in chapter 3.

[Kothar_Isk]

Great story so far man i can't wait til I get mine worked on. I'll definatly have to but it up here. Keep up the good work.