A song by the General

Therin · Gloompf. Iggle! Gender: Joined: 24 Sep 2002

You...
And you tear yourself apart!
And you think that you're the only one
who feels the way you do...

And you...
You burn us all away!
And you don't know why but you know that if you let us in, you'll only be in for a
whole
new
world
of

PAIN!
It's the only thing that keeps you moving!
PAIN!
It's the only factor you can't escape!
Every one that you drive away.
It keeps on building every day.
Soon you'll be consumed by all this pain.

You...
You are so beautiful.
And you don't know why I continue to try
To show myself to you.

And you...
You had hoped my love would die.
It would make it so much easier, and you wouldn't have to live in fear of so
much
blin-
-ding

PAIN!
It's the only thing you don't have control of!
PAIN!
It's the only reason you run away!
Keep on running every day.
Wish that you could stop to say.
But you're too afraid of pain.

But I...
I don't give until the end!
And I won't accept the loss of something
That feels so right.

And I...
Want to show you all that I know!
Want to take your hand, follow me, I don't know the way, but I'll help you through this
end-
-less
maze
of
Pain.

~Fin.

Comments are welcome, as always.

Doot · Posted: Wed May 05, 2004 2:54 pm Post subject:

I can hear the yelling in the song from reading it.

Therin · Gloompf. Iggle! Gender: Joined: 24 Sep 2002

Arigatou!

Which reminds me:

Any thoughts for a title? Anyone? Anyone at all?

Edit: Oh yeah!

Who would sing it?

Cuz...I can't sing, period.

But I was thinking Amy Lee would be the best choice, although Aaron Lewis or the lead singer of Nickelback would also do a good job, IMO.

reaper · I miss you Shar Gender: Joined: 28 Dec 2002

To me it sounds like somethin linken park would sing, oh does that guy love to scream.

Musashi · Scrummy Translator Gender: Joined: 07 Nov 2002

Yeah, I agree with Reaper. Very Linkin Park-ish. Good job Lews!

Diablo · Host of Kirahaad Gender: Joined: 12 Apr 2003

i liked it alot and i must agree.. it is linkin park-ish

Minosheep · Posted: Wed May 05, 2004 5:46 pm Post subject:

I don't find it Linkin Park-ish at all. If anything, it reminds me of Mudvayne.

Why not a simple title like Pain? Confused

emmy · Senior Otaku Gender: Joined: 05 Dec 2003

it sounds like smile empty soul or afi....i like it tho!

Ming · DOOM! Gender: Joined: 13 Jan 2003

Good job dude. Maybe I'll sit down one day and try to write something like this. At any rate, all the bands mentioned would really fit the bill to sing it, because its a song of that type of genre. But if I had to pick one, I would say maybe AFI, just because the lyrics are pretty poetic, and they write pretty poetic music, while at the same time doing an excellent job at demonstrating anguish. I can just picture Davey singing this.

As for titles, how about "And You..."?

Therin · Gloompf. Iggle! Gender: Joined: 24 Sep 2002

*shrug* not title has yet popped out that fits well enough. I've been trying my own on for size as well, and none of them work either :p

Pain comes close, but not quite. And I've already written something more appropriately titled pain.

Hmmm...I may have to sing this for someone so they can understand why I picked Amy Lee, Aaron Lewis, or the other guy over anyone else.