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Therin
Gloompf. Iggle!



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PostPosted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 4:21 am    Post subject: Where?

Inspired by, and sung to the tune of:
Inner Universe, by Yoko Kanno.

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Angels falling all around me, demons in my skin
All the world that waits below me, screaming from within
I fill with wonder, I feel everything
My eyes come open, I spread my wings!

Falling white snowflakes
Falling white snowflakes
Aeria Gloris
Aeria Gloris

All of my comrades
All of my comrades
Aeria Gloris
Aeria Gloris


Am I soaring high enough? High enough to follow?
I wish I knew the future.
Calling, calling, why will no one hear me?
Silence tells me nothing.

No one is left here
No one is left here
Aeria Gloris
Aeria Gloris

Stand alone...in this life the way is clear...where?...I don't know but I will
Stand alone...nothing's really ever
gone before the end

Come with me! I will show you how to live the life you could!
See all the wonders at your feet!

I will...NEVER LET YOU DOWN!!!

Calling, calling out, why is there no answer?
How is my heart still beating?
Calling, calling, wond'ring where my life has gone.
What all my times have come to.

Calling, calling out, all who speak say nothing,
Around me wildly yearning
Calling, calling out, sounds are not returning
The world fades out behind me

Screaming, screaming out, I will find you someday!
The world is waiting for us.

Never will I stop
Never will I rest
Aeria Gloris
Aeria Gloris

Glory my beacon
Glory my beacon
Till we're together
Somewhere I'll find you.

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If you read, thank you for doing so. Comments are not only welcome, but will leave me indebted to you. *bow*

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Venus
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 4:27 am    Post subject:

Wow..thats All I can say...Its awesome! I love it!! Very very nicely done!

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Silver Adept
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 9:03 am    Post subject:

I liked the tune, and your verses fit it quite well. Although it would take the right kind of male voice to really get that song to sound what I would consider right.

All in all, good job.

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Blues
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 2:08 pm    Post subject:

Awesomeful to the extreme, and by that I mean it really rocked hard, and by that I mean it's totally kick-ass.
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Therin
Gloompf. Iggle!



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PostPosted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 3:29 pm    Post subject:

Venus: Arigatou!

Silver - That's interesting, I imagined it in a male voice as well. Go figure ^_^

Blues: heh, thanks man Razz

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Silver Adept
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2004 12:34 am    Post subject:

Well, in my conceit, I tried to imagine my own voice signing it, and I realized that if it tracked to the original, I don't have the range for it. But even now, as I've looked over it, I can see some harmonics or octaves weaving their way into it. Plus, I could feel some personal things coming from it. So I imagined a male voice. Possibly with something that bordered death-metal screaming... it's not quite the light piece that the original is, in my head.

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Therin
Gloompf. Iggle!



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PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2004 12:41 am    Post subject:

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Well, in my conceit, I tried to imagine my own voice signing it, and I realized that if it tracked to the original, I don't have the range for it.


<_< I do that. I think I have the range for it, though I would have to go dangerously close to falsetto.

Other than that, I agree with everything you said. Thanks, man, I appreciate the feedback.

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Therin
Gloompf. Iggle!



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PostPosted: Sun Nov 07, 2004 10:49 pm    Post subject:

I Therin's writing habits were at all predictable, he'd have done the smart thing and created a thread in which to place all of the crappy songs he feels compelled to write. But they aren't. So, instead, he finds himself here, talking in the third person, and politely asking for a renaming of this particular thread, from "Where?" to "Therin's Songstravaganza"

<_<

What?

He thought it was funny.

Anyway, on to his next, which he is tentatively naming "She".
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"Have you ever had to hurt someone for their own good? Caused dark, searing, rending pain for the sake of giving them a better future? I have."

I look at her, she looks at me,
I think of how I used to be,
Of all the ways I've changed since she came along.

She taught me things I'd never known,
I showed her things I'd never shown,
Discovered things I hadn't felt in so long.

And now she's asking me why,
And I can't look her in the eye,
'Cause I can't afford to shatter my resolve!

[Chorus]Have you seen the way she looks at me?
She's blinded, living in a dream,
She thinks that I am someone I cannot become!

I'm not the man she thinks she knows,
I blind, I don't know where to go,
I know it's wrong God damnit, but it has to be done!

"I came this close to making my own end that night. I bear scars from it today that will probably never heal. Maybe I lacked the courage not to inflict myself upon the world, or maybe I lacked the cowardice to take the easy way out. Or maybe I wasn't human enough to punish what rightfully deserved punishment."

The tears are welling in her eyes,
And all I want to do is try
To make her understand what she can't comprehend.

I want to do what I've always done,
Make her see that she's not alone,
But how can a betrayer make amends?

And now she's running inside,
And I just want to die,
Wanna strip my skin and rip out both my eyes!

[Chorus]

"I had just deeply hurt one of my closest friends, in cold blood. I had taken her heart, and shattered it upon cold, hard, concrete logic. How could I come through that unpunished, and still be human? I still don't know. I loathe myself for what I did, but it had to be done. Am I a coward, or am I a paragon of courage? I did what had to be done. But have no illusions about life. It isn't painless, and it isn't perfect. And you will have regrets, no matter what you do. Would you have done the right thing?"

~fin.
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*shrug* It's crap compared to my other two, but I wrote it anyway. Feel free to shred it into little tiny pieces with critique if you want. I'm always looking for ways to get better ^_^

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Kiyomi
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 07, 2004 11:08 pm    Post subject:

No idea how the tune would go, but awesome lyrics.

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Silver Adept
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 08, 2004 12:42 am    Post subject:

Glad to know I had a decent ear for the first piece. Now I'll turn my attention to the second.

This sounded kind of prog-rock to me, something that you might see Dream Theater playing, on the first pass. But on a second pass, I tried to make it resolve with the dark tone of the lyrics, and an orchestral feel came out of it. Neither of those felt right, though, so on the third pass, it came out as a light pop-rock sort of sound. But this one's a vocalist-heavy track. the instrumentation behind it wouldn't be much and would be pretty simple.

The lyrics strike close to home, Therin. I have days like those. Perhaps not involving girls or women, but the kids of days where you contemplate like that.

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